Hot Hot Hot #limerick

Posted on May 3, 2023 by TanGental

This week’s prompt is face and I’m up onto my soap box

First I wrote this

For all those running the human race
And remaining intent on upping their pace:
If you don’t stop bleating
That we’re not overheating,
You’ll never again show your face…

Then I thought of a better last line, even though it took me from the prompt..

For all those running the human race
And remaining intent on upping their pace:
If you don’t stop bleating
That we’re not overheating,
History will judge you a total disgrace.

About TanGental

My name is Geoff Le Pard. Once I was a lawyer; now I am a writer. I've published several books: a four book series following Harry Spittle as he grows from hapless student to hapless partner in a London law firm; four others in different genres; a book of poetry; four anthologies of short fiction; and a memoir of my mother. I have several more in the pipeline. I have been blogging regularly since 2014, on topic as diverse as: poetry based on famous poems; memories from my life; my garden; my dog; a whole variety of short fiction; my attempts at baking and food; travel and the consequent disasters; theatre, film and book reviews; and the occasional thought piece. Mostly it is whatever takes my fancy. I avoid politics, mostly, and religion, always. I don't mean to upset anyone but if I do, well, sorry and I suggest you go elsewhere. These are my thoughts and no one else is to blame. If you want to nab anything I post, please acknowledge where it came from.
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32 Responses to Hot Hot Hot #limerick

  1. derrickjknight says:
    May 3, 2023 at 3:44 pm

    Fair enough in the interests of improvement

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  2. willowdot21 says:
    May 3, 2023 at 3:46 pm

    Both excellent!

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  3. noelleg44 says:
    May 3, 2023 at 3:50 pm

    Second version is the winner!

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  4. joylennick says:
    May 3, 2023 at 4:12 pm

    Jolly good, Geoff – but what about just changing the second line?
    “For all those running the human race,
    remaining intent on showing their face…” x

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  5. L.K. Latham says:
    May 3, 2023 at 4:38 pm

    Nicely catchy!

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  7. Elizabeth says:
    May 3, 2023 at 7:13 pm

    I’m with you on that. Reality doesn’t need a soap box, just opened eyes!

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  8. Erika says:
    May 3, 2023 at 7:54 pm

    The second one speaks truly clearly!

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  9. John W. Howell says:
    May 3, 2023 at 8:27 pm

    You second is an improvement.

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  10. tootlepedal says:
    May 3, 2023 at 10:27 pm

    Good poems and sound sense too.

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  11. Chel Owens says:
    May 4, 2023 at 5:37 am

    For all those ruining the human race
    Who remaining intent on upping their pace:
    If you don’t stop bleating
    That we’re not overeating,
    We’ll soon judge your wit by your waist.

    Okay…. but on the same topic:
    For all those running the human race
    And remaining intent on keeping their place:
    If you don’t stop bleating
    That we’re not overheating,
    Your legacy will be a waste.

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  12. robertawrites235681907 says:
    May 8, 2023 at 6:04 am

    Very well done, Geoff. I prefer the first ending. At the rate global warming is happening there wont be anyone left to record the history or read it.

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  13. surrealartpsychonaut says:
    May 19, 2023 at 4:39 am

    Everyone running the human race,
    who is intent on picking up the pace,
    and constantly, outlandishly bleating
    the lie that Earth isn’t overheating,
    you’re a jarring joke, a dopey disgrace.

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  14. surrealartpsychonaut says:
    May 19, 2023 at 4:49 am

    * Another attempt at getting the rhythm right.

    Everyone running the human race,
    who is intent on picking up the pace,
    and forever, outlandishly bleating
    the lie that Earth isn’t overheating,
    you’re a jarring joke, a dopey disgrace.

    Liked by 1 person

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