Finding your niche #writephoto #shortstory

This is the latest of Sue Vincent’s #writephoto prompts. I thought ‘romance’ this week

sue vincent stepping stones Montgomery Small was, depending who was speaking: plump, well-covered, big-boned, fat and obese. All these labels acted on his confidence, draining him of hope. He was 25 and had accepted his fate. He retained only 2 ambitions: to be able to walk unaided and to meet someone who appreciated a rippled rather than ripped torso.

As his weight grew his mobility shrank, more from embarrassment than any physical limitation. He was virtually a recluse when a young smiley woman moved in next door. Glorious Ntoke had a good heart and a never say no attitude. She attempted to cajole Monty to join her on one of her many outings. Finally, she told him she would stop nagging if he came to see the famous stepping stones at Castle Drool.

‘It will be fun. You wait and see.’

When Monty still resisted, she said, ‘No one else will come with me. I’m frightened of the ghost. They say you can hear her humming when you walk over the stepping stones.’

She looked genuinely anxious and Monty’s heart shifted a little; he agreed.

By the time they arrived Monty knew it was a huge mistake. He was covered in sweat, his knees ached and a group of teenagers had begun to tease him.

Somehow Glorious manoeuvred him to the water’s edge but nothing would persuade him to jump onto the first stone. She pulled a face. ‘I’ll do it myself,’ she said, as she leapt; but her foot caught and she began to fall.

‘Monty,’ she cried in desperation.

Never had Monty’s body moved so fast. With what passed for a single bound, Monty jumped and enveloped dainty Glorious in his capacious arms. For a brief, ecstatic moment Monty felt the elation of the unexpected hero. Then inertia took hold. Stopping quickly was beyond Monty. He jumped again, and again. Monty’s ears throbbed with the humiliating laughter of the watchers at this ludicrous sight. Forlornly he looked at Glorious’ face, expecting ridicule. Instead he saw joy and, incredibly, admiration.

‘Listen Monty. Listen to your feet.’

Monty listened. What he heard wasn’t laughter but music, a music the like of which had not been heard in a thousand years. Each step of Monty’s elephantine dance released a sonorous rumbling, a deep intense note the like of which caused the listeners to weep with exhilaration.

The watching crowd, who indeed expected disaster cheered. Glorious hugged such of her man as she could hold while he continued his thunderous jig.

‘You’re playing the stones, Monty. It’s the Giant’s Piano.’ And she kissed him, ignoring the dripping sweat, the glowing skin. ‘My hero.’

About TanGental

My name is Geoff Le Pard. Once I was a lawyer; now I am a writer. I've published three books - Dead Flies and Sherry Trifle, My Father and Other Liars and Salisbury Square. In addition I published an anthology of short stories, Life, in a Grain of Sand this summer. A fourth book will be out soon. This started life as a novel in a week on this blog and will follow later this year. I blog about all sorts at geofflepard.com and welcome all comments. These are my thoughts and no one else is to blame. If you want to nab anything I post, please acknowledge where it came from.
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21 Responses to Finding your niche #writephoto #shortstory

  1. Excellent! 👍👍👍👍👍

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  2. Such a Glorious beginning to romance. Nice one, Geoff. 💖

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  3. Ritu says:

    Great tale Geoffles!

    Like

  4. Anabel Marsh says:

    That’s sweet! I know you said romance, but I wasn’t really expecting a happy ending.

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  5. M. L. Kappa says:

    Very romantic, Goeffles!

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  6. esthernewton says:

    Another gem, Geoff. Super characterisation 🙂

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  7. jan says:

    How sweet! Course you couldn’t help just a wee bit of snark!

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  8. Charli Mills says:

    Great story and interpretation of the stones! This is my favorite two lines because it is so true of us humans: “For a brief, ecstatic moment Monty felt the elation of the unexpected hero. Then inertia took hold.” Splendid shot of humor!

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  9. Autism Mom says:

    Love this! I may or may not have gotten a little prickly eyed while reading this … 😉

    Liked by 1 person

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