The Sea and Santa #poem #poetry

The Rondolet is the latest poetry form sprung on us by Jane Doughtery here, with this picture as a prompt.

jane d prompt boat rondolet

Necessarily I went straight of piste with this one

When Santa doesn’t come

Every Christmas Day, I cry

When Santa doesn’t come

My brother says ‘you’re really dumb’

Dad drinks gin and mummy sighs

And lunch is carrot soup and one mince pie

When Santa doesn’t come.

 Nothing to do with the picture but still, I then did this one, for Jane (she’s very strict)

The sea is very rough

I think my sister’s about to chunder

The sea is very rough

I know by that sticky sounding cough

You think she’s going to split asunder.

Oh good god I think we’re going under

The sea is very rough

but, in truth I prefer the first.

About TanGental

My name is Geoff Le Pard. Once I was a lawyer; now I am a writer. I've published three books - Dead Flies and Sherry Trifle, My Father and Other Liars and Salisbury Square. In addition I published an anthology of short stories, Life, in a Grain of Sand this summer. A fourth book will be out soon. This started life as a novel in a week on this blog and will follow later this year. I blog about all sorts at geofflepard.com and welcome all comments. These are my thoughts and no one else is to blame. If you want to nab anything I post, please acknowledge where it came from.
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26 Responses to The Sea and Santa #poem #poetry

  1. Ritu says:

    I rather liked the first one!

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  2. I like the second one. Love the idea of your sister splitting asunder 🙂

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  3. M. L. Kappa says:

    The seconds not bad at all either…

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  4. Mick Canning says:

    I like them both!

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  5. LOL. You’re a riot, Geoff. Yes, I like the first one too. I’m no kind of poet — I couldn’t have managed anything at all. Happy weekend hugs!

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  6. jan says:

    I like them both! Good job!

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  7. Nothing wrong with either one, but I DO like the first one more. 😀

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  8. noelleg44 says:

    Lovely painting, but I’m with you – I prefer the first poem. Great job, Geoff!

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  9. Erika Kind says:

    I love both in their different ways!

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  10. Sacha Black says:

    *cough* the first *cough*

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  12. Hm, I must say I like them both! But the second one is more powerful, for sure=)

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  13. I like the second one best. It made me laugh out loud…

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  14. Kat Myrman says:

    If you were taking a poll Geoff, I would vote for the second…the idea of sea sickness made me laugh! 🙂

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