To see ourselves #shortstory #write photo

sue vincent spiral stair

To see ourselves

 ‘What’s at the top?’

‘Come you’ll see.’ She ran ahead, quick steps heading for the light.

He shouldn’t have come. He should have told her. It’s over.

She held the door, a smile that said all and nothing playing on her lips.

The room, a circle filled with mirrors and dazzled with the sun above.

He spun, dizzy. ‘I can’t see you.’ He hid the panic, just.

‘Take my hand. You’ll see.’

Warm fingers took his. Instantly he was there but his hand held the other, not her. Her voice cut

Iike glass.

‘It shows your true love.’

The now bitter hand pulled hard and he span, faster until he crashed back through the door. Relief replaced fear and he placed an uncertain foot on the first step, desperate to leave.

In an instant the stairs became a slide. Soft fingers caressed his neck as she eased him over the edge and he was slipping down, down past the entrance door and on, towards her endless mirthless laughter.

This is based on  a picture prompt from Sue Vincent

About TanGental

My name is Geoff Le Pard. Once I was a lawyer; now I am a writer. I've published four books - Dead Flies and Sherry Trifle, My Father and Other Liars, Salisbury Square and Buster & Moo. In addition I have published three anthologies of short stories and a memoir of my mother. More will appear soon. I will try and continue to blog regularly at about whatever takes my fancy. I hope it does yours too. These are my thoughts and no one else is to blame. If you want to nab anything I post, please acknowledge where it came from.
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11 Responses to To see ourselves #shortstory #write photo

  1. He really should have listened to that little voice. Great story!

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  2. Ritu says:


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  3. Fairy tale meets sci-fi meets horror ….. It must be the Le Pard genre 🙂 This is really good! 🙂

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  4. davidprosser says:

    Just a leedle bit chilling there Geoff.


  5. greyzoned/angelsbark says:

    Oh I really like that! Chilling with her laughter at the end there too… I could feel his panic
    Nicely done!

    Michele at Angels Bark

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  6. kutukamus says:

    Ugh, that she sure seemed scary 🙂

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