Domestic Disaster – a short story

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Artificial Snow

Jane stared at the parody of the perfect Christmas: tumbling drifts covering the steps and clinging to trees.

Jim sniggered behind her. ‘You’ll not get out of this one.’

‘Why not? I can get a broom…’

‘I think you might want to pray.’

Jane tried defiance, even if her heart wasn’t in it. ‘Why?’

Jim pointed. ‘When you opened the backdoor to let out the suds that filled the kitchen because you opened the washing machine, what was on the top step?’

Jane goggled as a familiar shape emerged from the foamy mass.

‘Or rather who?’

This is in response to Sue Vincent’s latest prompt here

About TanGental

My name is Geoff Le Pard. Once I was a lawyer; now I am a writer. I've published four books - Dead Flies and Sherry Trifle, My Father and Other Liars, Salisbury Square and Buster & Moo. In addition I have published three anthologies of short stories and a memoir of my mother. More will appear soon. I will try and continue to blog regularly at about whatever takes my fancy. I hope it does yours too. These are my thoughts and no one else is to blame. If you want to nab anything I post, please acknowledge where it came from.
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39 Responses to Domestic Disaster – a short story

  1. blondeusk says:

    Now you have got me thinking! Love the take on this!

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  2. Ritu says:

    Lol! I wanna know who, too!! Was it mum or dad?!

    Liked by 1 person

  3. susieshy45 says:

    Who was it ? And who dunnit ?
    Love this.

    Liked by 1 person

  4. gordon759 says:

    And there was I thinking, from the title, that it was going to be an autobiographical piece.

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  5. Who? Who? Who? o_O
    😀 😀 😀

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  6. Sue Vincent says:

    Oh nice 🙂 Thanks Geoff 🙂


  7. kirsty says:

    Brilliant. Can’t look at that picture without seeing soap suds.

    Liked by 1 person

  8. I hope it’s not the pet dog!

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  9. jan says:

    They had a monster living in their washing machine? Oh my!

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  10. Judy Martin says:

    HaHA! This was a brilliant take on the picture, Geoff! 🙂


  11. You can’t leave it there – that’s is just cruuuuuuuueeeeeeeeeeelllllllllll!!!!!!!!!!! Whoisit? whoisit? whoisit?????

    Liked by 1 person

  12. noelleg44 says:

    Clever, clever – and leaving me wondering….

    Liked by 1 person

  13. Helen Jones says:

    Disaster indeed! 😀

    Liked by 1 person

  14. Norah says:

    Oh dear! I think it’s too late for prayer. She’d better start running! Great story.

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  17. I think it’s tthe washing machine repair man, sick to death of coming to the house where they always put the wrong sort of washing powder into the automatic machine – and now he’ll charge them double time for having to come out a Christmas!


  18. macjam47 says:

    Who? I’ll be thinking about this all night. Who?


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