Freeze frame

Charli’s prompt this week is

November 3, 2015 prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a frozen story. Is the weather the source of freezing or is a character frozen by emotion or lack of it? It can also be a moment frozen in time. What does it reveal?

Here we go, on with Mary in Ireland

A frozen moment

Mary’s hands shook; the feather-light envelope seemed heavy in her fingers. Part of her wanted to run: home, away, anywhere. Part wanted to see proof of what she felt to be true; that Katherine – the happy smiley Katherine of hugs and sighs – was her sister. She and Rupert had hardly had enough time to understand her and her family, yet she had taken a piece of Mary’s heart.

She opened the door; five faces stared at her, like some family diorama in the Museum. A frozen moment, heavy with portent.

She slid her finger along the seal.

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About TanGental

My name is Geoff Le Pard. Once I was a lawyer; now I am a writer. I've published four books - Dead Flies and Sherry Trifle, My Father and Other Liars, Salisbury Square and Buster & Moo. In addition I have published three anthologies of short stories and a memoir of my mother. More will appear soon. I will try and continue to blog regularly at about whatever takes my fancy. I hope it does yours too. These are my thoughts and no one else is to blame. If you want to nab anything I post, please acknowledge where it came from.
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8 Responses to Freeze frame

  1. What?! NO! I understand that you’re in the middle of your Nanthology but this is completely unacceptable. I will not wait until next week. I will bribe you with cake if I have to. (It will be store-bought, don’t worry.)

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  2. davidprosser says:

    The telling moment, The tension at fever pitch and you apply a TV serial ending with the promise of more to come.Ouch and Ouch again.
    May I say you write beautifully Geoff but without doubt you also write short. Just think of all of us looking up your address to threaten the violence only known to writers which might even include an aerial bombardment of eggs…(Hmm death by omelette) unless you rethink the length of this episode.

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  4. Charli Mills says:

    Was it quick to write 99 words after your long daily stretches? Yes, you have created tension and are making us wait!

    Liked by 3 people

  5. Norah says:

    Drumroll …… and the answer is ____! Come on, Geoff. We all want to know. Great flash.

    Liked by 1 person

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